Today in room 1 we did a slow write about a highlight of our holiday. On the holidays I went to Rotorua with my family, and we went to the luge while we were in Rotorua, so I wrote mine on that. please leave a comment, hope you enjoy.
“I WIN!”
Woohoo!!
I feel like this will be another win for me on the luge!
I felt bright and warm, completely opposite to the weather. I could almost taste the victory
as I zoomed down the track at a gazillion miles per hour.
Could this be any better?
Quickly closing in from behind was dad and Amelia!
Could I hold them off for long enough?
Although they passed me, they started creeping towards each other, so I had no time to turn away so
I drove right in between them. bang!!!
It all happened as quick as a flash, Amelia skidded to a halt, and me, being the awesome, fun and
competitive person that I am, I raced into the lead.
“Why is it that whenever I pass Amelia, she gets really mad?” I thought.
Soon after the magnificent crash, I pass the finish line first, and I shout “I WIN!”
Kia ora Hunter
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your holiday highlight. You structured your sentences well and I liked your choice of words. I'm all for being a little competitive!! Congratulations on your win! Keep trying Amelia:-)
you go
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